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Some feel governments should invest in preserving minority languages, while others feel this is not a good use of resources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In the present day, the usage of own and international languages are the primary concern in any society.
Although
 some people claim that authorities ought to invest in
minority
 languages, others believe that
this
 investment is not a remarkable idea. I tend to agree with the latter. From my point of view, society ought to promote a
language
that is
 both spoken by most people and
also
 renowned in many countries. On the one hand, one part of the population believes that
this
 investment is a way of preserving the local culture since the history of the community would be maintained.
Furthermore
, these individuals claim that speaking a
minority
language
 may be differential in relation to other nations.
In other words
, it could be a great opportunity in order to grasp the attention of other countries.
On the other hand
, another part of the population assumes that
this
 process may be tremendously outrageous resulting in a needless expense.
Moreover
,
this
 procedure to maintain a
minority
language
 requires a group of expert workers who should be trained which leads to a process extremely slow. As far as I am concerned, governments need to promote a
language
 spoken for most people
such
 as English and French rather than
minority
 and local languages. Investing in a popular and international
language
 is a chance so as to promote not only emotional intelligence but
also
 work skills.
In addition
, a famous and popular
language
 demonstrates be much more attractive than
minority
 ones. Children and adults tend to be attracted to topics that are known to everyone. In conclusion, both situations may result in advantages and disadvantages,
however
, the usage of an international and popular
language
 is much more useful not only to society but
also
 to individuals.
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