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You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment in your Company • Describe the problem with the equipment • Explain how this problem is affecting your work • Say what you want the shop or company to do

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am working as a Project Manager for Edelweiss Ltd. and
since
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for
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last
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the last
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 two months have been working from home as a preferred option. I am writing
this
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 letter in regard to the
laptop
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 provided by the company
that is
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 not functioning properly. Since
last
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 week the
laptop
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 keyboard had
problem
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a problem
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 typing a few letters- W, O and Z. The keys had to be pressed hard. I have missed out on
spellings
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while
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 writing the documents and more efforts are spent typing. To my horror, since yesterday evening during my
skype
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 session with an international client, these keys stopped working totally.I have been managing work by connecting an external keyboard to the
laptop
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, which takes longer to operate and is cumbersome. I have an important delivery of project next week so it is crucial to fix
this
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 problem immediately. I request you to replace my
laptop
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 as soon as possible with another fully functional
laptop
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 with necessary software installed.
Also
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, please do not forget to install a browser security program. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely,

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task achievement
Ensure consistency in verb tense throughout the letter (e.g., use 'has had' for ongoing issues).
task achievement
Consider adding a specific deadline for the requested resolution to emphasize urgency.
coherence and cohesion
While the structure is clear, consider using transition phrases to enhance flow between ideas.
task achievement
The letter effectively describes the problem and its impact on work, demonstrating clear task achievement.
task achievement
There is a polite and professional tone maintained throughout, which is appropriate for business correspondence.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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