Write about the following topic: Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Lots of

people

are suffering from being poverty-stricken. Poor

people

can be seen in underdeveloped and developing

countries

more often. To alleviate these challenges, developed regions allocate

an

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adequate

amounts

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amount

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of

money

to the

governments

. Yet, despite all the efforts,

governments

can not decrease

this

problematic situation. I agree with the idea that

instead

of giving

money

to the local states, rich

countries

should send commissioners to investigate less wealthy fields or give them an education or healthcare services opportunities to cut down on their problems.

First

and foremost, due to the rich

countries

helps,

governments

can alleviate the poverty problem, but in some

countries

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we can easily see that managers take advantage of

these

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aids.

For instance

, after the region accepted immigrants, Turkey took a

sufficent

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sufficient

amount of

money

from BM so that Turkey will hold the migrants inside of their boundaries and Europe will give out payment to the country.

Thus

, immigrants will be looked after.

However

, in spite of the payments,

people

leaving their hometown have suffered from poverty.

In addition

, the poverty rates of local

ones

have steadily increased.

On the other hand

, financial support can't solve all problems. Without fixing a place's broken system, nobody can offer convenient conditions to the poor

people

. Yet, providing them educational or medical services

such

as scholarships, school opportunities in reach areas or to take responsibility for their medical needs. Problematic economical situations may occur everywhere and

this

is a force to be reckoned with. In conclusion, due to the help of rich continents poor

ones

find an opportunity to fix themselves.

On the other hand

, since some

governments

abuse these supports they continue to stay in their certain position. Yet sending commissioners to these areas to follow the condition we can take favourable consequences.

Last

but not least,

money

can not figure out every trouble. Wealthy

ones

try to provide education or medicine solves so that poorer

ones

can be improved both economically and culturally.