Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There are some people having a notion that when an unwanted situation happens,
for example
,
a
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difficulty in career path or lack of money, we ought to do nothing but suffer from it without any actions.
By contrast
, others suggest trying to cope with these
problems
. From my point of view, I strongly believe we had better deal with these difficulties. With the
first
perception, since some people commonly try to avoid risks, they may feel reckless to do anything in
such
situations. It means that they deny acting but try to undergo the
problems
that they have. It is the feeling of safety that they want to have.
For instance
, pressure as a human's job is, he still does not try applying for another vacancy as he is afraid to
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loose
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his current career.
On the other hand
, I think the opinion above is
such
a fallacy. Only when you find some ways to tackle your difficulty can you find another opportunity. Since you would not know if the result is good or not, it is worth facing the
problems
. Failures are nothing, they are
also
valuable
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experience
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for you. Taking an example, if a business organization is in its economic depression, and the director does not find any
chances
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, it is absolutely certain that
this
company will go bankrupt.
However
, if he knows how to find proper support, he may improve
this
situation. Urgent actions would bring so many advantages. In conclusion, I think that we would rather deal with the
problems
in our life with our maximum potential
,
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so that we never regret anything.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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