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Families who sent their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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system
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 has always been the centre of attraction for any state.
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, distribution of
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 either private or
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 is much discussed issue.
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, I strongly condemned the imposing of taxes by The
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 on people should be trickle down rather applying on a much higher rates.In
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 regard I will support my view point with strong understanding. If we look into the micro level, Those parents who send their children to Private
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 is because they lost their confidence on
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education
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-
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.Since, no doubt we have the best teachers to offer, but somehow the organisation structure and monitoring policies are not in their favoure.g: The poor is bound to send their children to local
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 knowing their standard.with limited recourses , absence of extracurricular activities,political pressure by state personal choices makes it more pathetic.
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, gardians manage to afford their child to teach them better
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 which can only be get in private schools.
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, paying high fees is not a piece of cake for them.
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: we are from a middle class and we have no guts to send out child to
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 ,
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 paying more than half of our salary on
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 fee along with already deductions of salary
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, GST,Sales
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 on minute daily household products , It would be injustice for us to pay more on fee. in
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 should established a slab-
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 on
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 deduction which should directly co-related with the total income of individual and must not imply high taxes as compared to those parents whose earnings are really high.
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,
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 should separately make a plan to provide best of the art-
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 just like other countries are onto it.
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: New Zealand , they are providing best
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 along with the reasonable salary-pay to the teachers.and bear the tac matter on their shoulders. To conclude,
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 authourities must follow proper policies and alligned justified budget on
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 ,So that we would produce highly skilled nation with minimal taxing
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 .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tax exemption
  • public education
  • private schools
  • collective responsibility
  • societal welfare
  • equitable access
  • financial burden
  • social cohesion
  • tax credits
  • vouchers
  • subsidies
  • state-funded
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • public vs. private sector
  • quality of education
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