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Band 7

You recently travelled on the local bus service in your town. You think the driver drove badly and was rude to the passengers. Write a letter to the manager of the local bus service. In your letter introduce yourself and say when the incident happened describe what you saw and heard say what you would like the bus company to do about it You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam, You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am a loyal customer of your transportation company. I often ride your buses,
therefore
 I know how your drivers usually work. But now, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with my
last
 travel experience on your bus. It was 04 April 2024, about 5 p.m. bus number was 5. I witnessed awful driver
behavior
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 and dangerous driving during our bus journey. The driver did not stick to speed limits.
Moreover
, he was notably rude to the passengers. In my opinion, your company should pay attention to
this
 case because if one of the drivers starts doing it constantly, the others will start doing the same things. In the end, it can lead to a decrease in your profits. I believe you could have a one-to-one meeting with
this
 driver to discuss the cause of
this
behavior
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. It can give him an opportunity to improve Thank you in advance for your attention to
this
 issue. Yours faithfully, Alex Smith
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Complete Response
Ensure you fully address all parts of the task. While you introduced the issue and requested action, elaborating on specific examples of bad driving and rudeness would strengthen your claim.
Logical Structure / Cohesion
To improve coherence, try to connect your ideas more smoothly between paragraphs. Transitions like "Additionally," "Furthermore," or "Regarding the driver's rudeness," could help.
Greeting and Closing
Your letter could benefit from a concluding paragraph that succinctly summarizes your main points and reemphasizes your request for a specific action from the bus company.
Single Idea Per Paragraph
For an even more effective letter, consider adding suggestions for how the situation could be monitored or suggestions for driver training programs to prevent future occurrences.
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