Everybody should donate a fixed amount of their income to support charity.’ How far do you share this viewpoint

In many countries,
charity
organizations are developed notably as huge companies
supporting
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support

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them monthly.
However
, some
people
claim that there should be some kind of tax on the salary of each to assist
income
for philanthropy. It seems to me that it is not right, and I will explain why in
this
essay.
Firstly
, some
people
tend to be lazy and if donations would be fixed,
vast
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the vast

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majority of society tend to do nothing and procrastinate. The matter is
income
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the income
an income

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of each individual, where each penny of salary of
single
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a single

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mother with three kids is much valuable for them
then
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than

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to someone who
pretend
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to live with no action.
This
would affect the morality of the human being
,
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and might cause economic destruction. A
second
negative factor is the ruining motives for
people
to work hard and be wealthier. By
this
mean
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means

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that more personal
income
means more taxes would be on it, so black accounting, hiding the business and raising the aggression might be the least of consequences. As an illustration, willing to help should be from
white
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heart, with no other meaning, like helping homeless dogs in shelters. It is true that there are some
positive
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positives

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to giving fixed amount for
charity
, at least once in
year
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a year
the year

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, most notably the help elderly
people
in pension, orphans and homeless animals. Despite
this
, it seems that
crowd
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should be educated in doing
this
by their own will, not by the force.
For example
, Angelina Joly, a famous actress, donates more than 80% of her
income
to different
charity
organizations.
This
lead
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us as a great example of human, to help others when you have
chance
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a chance

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to help. To conclude, the problems with
charity
income
should be not forced by anyone, it is a choice of each to donate or not. If
person
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a person
the person

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do
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not have sufficient cash to do it, he should not be shamed.
This
is not to say that only you can help yourself, but in circumstances where it is impossible, the world is always bearing kind
people
to help on it, but these days it appears to be the case not frequently.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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