Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day. Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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obile

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phone

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has become a

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rucial equipment of o

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life. It does not only helps adults with their work,

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but

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the

children

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with their learning and keeping in touch with their

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while they are apart. While there are opinions a

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agree

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device should be kept out of the

children

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, I believe letting the

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a

phone

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on their side, even on school days, brings more benefits than downsides. The biggest concern when allowing

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to keep a mobile

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is that they will focus too much t

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the virtual

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and forget their r

eal life

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real-life

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and tasks. Most of the phones given to

kids

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nowadays are smartphones, which help them to connect to the internet and have d

ifferents

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activities, as well as interactions with games and friends far away. It cannot be denied that these are more attractive than the schoolife and limited a

tmostphere

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atmosphere

around them.

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, the young will have a tendency of diving to explore the

world

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that they do not know,

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, be distracted from s

tudy,

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and communicate less with their

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and relatives. Studies have shown that teenagers in recent decades spend more time surfing webs, joining different social media communities, and have l

ess

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connections with people around them, which they hardly find anyone with the same habits as them. Another problem that mobile

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brings about is that it can make

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t

o f

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ace more dangers. It is not only about the c

yber criminals,

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which is a new and popular concern with the bloom of social n

etwork,

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about the old threat of thieves, who always waiting for chances to steal valuable things. Smartphones are not cheap, and it is one of the targets that the stealers aiming at.

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, the advantages of letting the

kids

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with a

mobile phones

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mobile phones

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is obvious.

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f b

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eing a tool to help

parents

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track of their

children

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, mobile

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up a wide range of information to the young, giving them chances to learn more and extend their knowledge for better studying and growing. For many students, m

obile

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the mobile

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phone

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has been a wonderful sidekick for them to search for materials for their paperwork,

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and encouraged them to investigate more on their school subjects.

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, mobile

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connects the young to share their thoughts. Since teenagers, especially in

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era, do not have the same way of thinking a

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their

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, it is difficult for them to communicate with their mom and dad to find a solution for their problems. In some cases, students

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find it hard to find friends that share their ideas, even at school, because of the small scale of classes and learning environment.

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, with the help of mobile

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hone,

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phones

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becomes easier. Many cases related to mental health, with depression and maybe

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suicide thoughts, have been resolved with the help of o

nline

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community. Even innovations have been made with the connection of the

kids

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with the same ideas over the

world

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. In conclusion, the advantages of

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having a mobile

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utweighs

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the disadvantages, in terms of encouraging and helping them e

xploring

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the

world

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,

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there are many problems that should be taken into consideration to create a safer environment for the ones involved.