Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day. Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

With the evolution of technology, m

obile

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the mobile

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phone

has become a

c

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rucial equipment of o

ur

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in our

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life. It does not only helps adults with their work,

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but

also

the

children

with their learning and keeping in touch with their

parents

while they are apart. While there are opinions a

grue

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agree

argue

that

this

device should be kept out of the

children

, I believe letting the

kids

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eeping

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a

phone

on their side, even on school days, brings more benefits than downsides. The biggest concern when allowing

children

to keep a mobile

phone

is that they will focus too much t

o

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on

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the virtual

world

and forget their r

eal life

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real-life

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and tasks. Most of the phones given to

kids

nowadays are smartphones, which help them to connect to the internet and have d

ifferents

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activities, as well as interactions with games and friends far away. It cannot be denied that these are more attractive than the schoolife and limited a

tmostphere

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atmosphere

around them.

Therefore

, the young will have a tendency of diving to explore the

world

that they do not know,

thus

, be distracted from s

tudy,

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and communicate less with their

parents

and relatives. Studies have shown that teenagers in recent decades spend more time surfing webs, joining different social media communities, and have l

ess

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connections with people around them, which they hardly find anyone with the same habits as them. Another problem that mobile

phone

brings about is that it can make

children

t

o f

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ace more dangers. It is not only about the c

yber criminals,

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which is a new and popular concern with the bloom of social n

etwork,

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but

also

about the old threat of thieves, who always waiting for chances to steal valuable things. Smartphones are not cheap, and it is one of the targets that the stealers aiming at.

However

, the advantages of letting the

kids

with a

mobile phones

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is obvious.

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o

f b

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eing a tool to help

parents

k

eeping

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track of their

children

, mobile

phone

also

o

pens

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open

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up a wide range of information to the young, giving them chances to learn more and extend their knowledge for better studying and growing. For many students, m

obile

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phone

has been a wonderful sidekick for them to search for materials for their paperwork,

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and encouraged them to investigate more on their school subjects.

In addition

, mobile

phone

connects the young to share their thoughts. Since teenagers, especially in

this

era, do not have the same way of thinking a

s

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their

parents

, it is difficult for them to communicate with their mom and dad to find a solution for their problems. In some cases, students

also

find it hard to find friends that share their ideas, even at school, because of the small scale of classes and learning environment.

However

, with the help of mobile

p

hone,

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phones

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this

becomes easier. Many cases related to mental health, with depression and maybe

also

suicide thoughts, have been resolved with the help of o

nline

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the online

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community. Even innovations have been made with the connection of the

kids

with the same ideas over the

world

. In conclusion, the advantages of

kids

having a mobile

phone

o

utweighs

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the disadvantages, in terms of encouraging and helping them e

xploring

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the

world

,

although

there are many problems that should be taken into consideration to create a safer environment for the ones involved.