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Today more countires import food from different parts of the world. Discuss the adventages and disadvantages of this trend. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Nowadays there are numerous nations which import and export
food
each
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 other. Some people think
this
 circumstance has
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merits, whereas others believe that it has not only
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advantages but
also
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demerits. In
this
 essay, I will compare the merits and demerits of
this
 notion. Clearly, there are positive effects on importing
food
.
Firstly
, it provides a wide variety of
food
.
For example
, in Korea, the public could not buy several fruits
such
 as mango, mangosteen and other tropical fruits in the market
few
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 years ago.
However
, people can purchase them recently due to importing.
Moreover
, it decreases the concern of
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constant
constantly
constanting
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 of
food
 supply. If there is a huge disaster in a country and the
agriculture
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 land
damaged
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 by other factors, the nation can import and supply easily from other parts of the world.
Nevertheless
, importing
food
 can cause negative situations
on
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 countries.
First
 of all, it makes the dependence on imports highly. Some categories are effective to buy from other nations rather than manufacture from enormous employees from the point of view of the government.
Furthermore
, the unemployment rate can decline.
For instance
, if a country
depend
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 on other nations in terms of
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crop
supplyment
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supplement
, a number of farmers, factories workers and provides to the market will be fired from their workplace. In conclusion, the dependence on imports and exports
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increases
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 recently.
Although
 it provides a wide variety of choosing
food
 and the possibility of preparing
from
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 emergency conditions, too much dependence is dangerous and it can decrease many types of positions.
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