A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her explain how to apply for the job
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to inform you that, I have found a suitable
job
as per your request in my local area from one of my friends and recommend you to apply for this
position.
As we both pursued our education in the data
analytics field, I believe you will be more interested in working as a Data
Analyst. This
job
requires a detail-oriented person and someone good with statistics. Moreover
, a person should be able to perform data
analysis and create Excel reports on a daily basis.
You already completed a statistics course for your further
business intelligence studies. Also
, working with Excel reports was something you are familiar with from our data
analytics domain. In addition
, you are good at paying attention to minor details. Thus
, I think you are the most eligible candidate for this
position.
You can definitely apply for this
opportunity online by visiting the company website. Please find the link to the job
careers website: www.walmartcareers.com. I suggest you upload a recently updated version of your resume. In addition
, you can provide my address details when applying for the job
.
Please let me know in case if you need further
details or clarifications. I hope you will apply for this
position.
Please reply to me at your earliest convenience.
Thank you.
Yours faithfully,
Harini VenkatramSubmitted by harini93.ind on
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greeting and closing
The structure of the letter needs improvement as the greeting and closing are not appropriate for an informal letter to a friend. Instead of 'Dear Sir or Madam,' start with 'Dear [Friend's name]' and rather than 'Yours faithfully,' use 'Best regards' or 'Warm wishes,' followed by your first name.
logical structure
The letter should be structured in a more logical way, with better paragraphing. Each paragraph should have a clear focus on a part of the task.
suitable writing tone
You addressed the tasks given but remember to write in a conversational and friendly tone suitable for a letter to a friend. Avoid excessive formality.
single idea per paragraph
Make sure each paragraph contains a single clear idea, which you did effectively for the most part.
complete response
The response is mostly complete but some parts can be expanded with more personal remarks or insights to enhance engagement as you write to a friend.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.