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Nowadays sending children to boarding school is becoming increasingly popular. Why is it ? Is it a positive or a negative development

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Boarding schools are getting popular nowadays . Because people believe that it
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 and it can
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 some believe that it has a negative impact .
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 in society.
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 can provide a real-life experience to children to children . Staying away from
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 can give them an idea about the real world out there . As they have to manage their work and themself
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 could create a better attitude towards problem-solving.
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 they became independent early in their life as compared to those who are living with their
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 . Because mother and father provide every basic necessity to their child .
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 , living in a hostel can expose them to numerous people with different thinking and mindset which can make them tolerant as an individual from various points of view . That can help them to create a better world to live in . Everything has its own pros and cons . And boarding schools could have negative effects .
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they are separated from their
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 and family members . They became very close to their friends . Because of peer pressure, they could get themselves into bad things
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 if they stay with their family can be properly guided . And because
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that they do not create problems in society . And the
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 fail to provide them
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 support as they stay away from their child .
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can have a positive
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 can encourage their children for boarding schools
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Ensure a clear and balanced position is taken and maintained throughout the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Develop a more consistent and cohesive logical structure with clear topic sentences for each paragraph.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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