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some country pay extremely high salaries for people. Some people believe that the country must not do that and make a limit for the salaries. Do you agree or disagree.

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There are a few countries where citizens can earn a huge amount of money.
People
 are considered to believe that
salaries
 are had to be restricted by the government. In my view, if some
people
 have big incomes, they will have a good effect on the economics of the
country
.
Moreover
, society might be inspired by the
people
 who have an extremely high salary. For these reasons, I completely disagree with the statement that the
country
 should control
salaries
. When it comes to developing economics, having enormous incomes
people
 can invest their money in cutting-edge technologies, engineering and science.
Consequently
, technological areas in a
country
 will be developed much faster than in countries where the government makes restrictions on
salaries
.
In addition
, the well-developed economy in a
country
 leads to improving the level of living.
Thus
, high
salaries
 are beneficial for a
country
. As for inspiring society by the human beings earning high
salaries
, it attracts the attention of young
people
 who probably will immigrate to a
country
 to live among rich successful
people
.
In other words
, many young
people
 are supposed to think that the adults having high profits live in a certain
country
 because there are comfortable and acceptable accommodations for existence.
Then
, inspired young
people
 will commute and do their best to reach the same salary. To summarize, due to human beings tending to upgrade their environment, brilliant young from the whole world immigrate to cities where they can get potentially a high income. To conclude, if the government enables citizens to have a high income, the city will get the two positive aspects. The former is a positive influence on the economy. The latter is attracting the best
people
 from all countries.
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