In some countries, people are no longer allowed to smoke in many public places and office buildings. Do you think this is a good rule or a bad rule?

Smoking is injurious to
health
. There are a number of countries where smoking is commonly used
places
is prohibited,
such
as cinemas, offices, and other publicly used locations. I believe it's a great law that can prevent indirect smoking and make
places
more livable and productive. I have explained my points of view in
further
paragraphs. To commence with, it's scientifically proved that passive smoking is the same destructive for the
health
as active smoking. Cigarette smoke can cause many critical
health
conditions
such
as cancer, heart fatigue and high blood pressure.
In addition
to that, it
also
reduces immune system strength which
also
invites other viral infections in the human body. Any country can't be developed well if it has more unhealthy people reside in.
For example
, in developing countries like Pakistan,
a
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smoking habit is a really big problem over there, which causes many
health
issues among the population which mitigate its economical growth.
Secondly
, passive smoking makes offices less productive which affects business and the overall work environment,
For instance
, there are different kinds of people who come office to work, many have various problems and allergies to smoke, if smoking is allowed in the workplace, all employees except smoker can face different
health
issues at the office which badly affect business growth. I totally support that smoking in public
places
is not advantageous for nations and offices, so
this
law should be kept like
this
and the government should try to apply
this
law to other public
places
such
as public washrooms, swimming pools, parties and social gatherings.
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