Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In
this
modern era, marketing influences people to buy products with the help of
advertisement
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advertisements

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. Companies and organizations advertise their
product
and
services
to increase
sale
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sales

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. A group of individuals opine that marketing convinces them to purchase a
product
, while others oppose the notion. In my opinion,
advertisement
plays a major role in
promotion
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the promotion

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of a
product
. In
this
essay, I am going to elaborate
my
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views in
forthcoming
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paragraphs. On the one hand, there are individuals who firmly believe in the power of endorsements.
First
and foremost, companies use aggressive promotion tricks and techniques to boost their brand, which leads to an eyeball effect and impact psychologically. Vibrant colours and contrasting designs attract customers to buy the
product
.
Moreover
,
advertisement
by celebrities
heightens
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this
craving for the
product
. Many famous actors and models use their
personality
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personalities

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to promote a
product
or brand.
For instance
,
popularity
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the popularity

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of the brand "Just Dial" grew after the famous actor "Amitabh Bachchan" was made the host of the
advertisement
.
Although
, marketing strategies are expensive;
however
, they are worth gaining
attention
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the attention

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of the public.
Hence
, adverts convince customers to buy things.
On the other hand
, another class of consumers admit that they no longer get affected by these adverts as they are so mass prevalent.
Firstly
, the ads are so repetitive that they feel frustrated and do not want to waste
anytime
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any time

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. For illustration, the firm OYO rooms
repeats
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repeat

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their reminder and
offers
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offer

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pop-ups on each and every media platform, after
sometime
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some time

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, people get to know about the
services
that they provide, and it may become usual.
Secondly
, these buyers go by the online reviews of the
product
and word of mouth,
thus
advertisements do not influence their choices. These days, consumers are aware
about
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the
services
that firms provide.
Consequently
, they search for products or
services
on the internet before consuming or buying them.
Thus
, individuals are not attentive because of these reasons. In conclusion, the sellers have some social responsibility, and
thus
, they must not show misleading adverts.
Likewise
, the consumers must not blindly follow them.
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