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Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. What are the causes of global warming and What measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue?

#world #measures #governments #individuals
It is undeniable that
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There has been an increase in global warming
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 one of the
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 problems that the world is confronted by in recent times. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall examine
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 activities are a major factor in the rise of
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greenhouse gases.
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, Factories and vehicles produce emissions and exhaust fumes , resulting in global temperature
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rise. One of the significant reasons, the number of cars on our streets is growing day by day. The increase
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air pollution.Global warming will have a considerable impact on our planet.
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temperature
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 will cause
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 of the polar ice caps.
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 result of
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 caused the perforation of the ozone layer and the intense heating of the air. But there are practical solutions to reduce global warming.
Firstly
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government
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 could introduce laws to limit emissions from factories . They should invest in renewable energy from solar, wind or water power.
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, many trees should be planted along the street, as It helps to keep fresh air.
Furthermore
, If we lessen to drive cars and
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 we should use bicycles. Through
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, people add more their aids to save our nature.
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 countries have developed an urban bike-sharing scheme. To sum it up, there are a lot of problems or issues that come up due to global warming. But , if we as individuals help the government solve these problems. I am sure all the issues will be tackled.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global issue
  • severity
  • urgency
  • greenhouse effect
  • human-induced
  • deforestation
  • fossil fuel combustion
  • industrial pollution
  • environmental regulations
  • emission standards
  • renewable energy sources
  • green technologies
  • international cooperation
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • energy consumption
  • public transportation
  • recycling
  • eco-friendly
  • extreme weather conditions
  • biodiversity
  • economic stability
  • collective responsibility
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