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Some countries import a large amount of food from other parts of the world. To what extent is this a positive or negative trend?

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Nowadays, it is common in some
countries
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 to
import
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 food from other
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instead
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 of cultivating them
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 their own. In my perspective,
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 is a positive trend. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain my point of view and give supporting reasons for my idea.
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 with, the main reason why some
countries
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 choose to
import
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 food is the weather and geographical situation. Some
foods
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 like nuts need dry and cold weather which is not possible for every country to cultivate them so there is no way except importing them Because if they want to prepare these criteria, they have to use high technology which needs a lot of money.
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, it is more economical to
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 them.
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 that,
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 amount of water is needed for cultivating some fruits and
foods
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 like watermelons and crops.
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, some
countries
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 even don’t have good soil for cultivating them.
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, in some
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 like Emirates or Saudi
Arabia
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 it is impossible to cultivate in the vast part of the country because the soil doesn’t have enough nutrients.
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, it is true that
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 it is more economical to produce these food products or fruits in our country but it can’t be ignored that the value of all the things we need to prepare for some
foods
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 are more than the price we sell so it is better to
import
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 them from other parts of the world. To sum up, I would argue that importing some kind of
foods
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 from other
countries
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 is a positive trend because of the reasons mentioned in
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