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The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia

The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia
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The two bar graphs illustrate methods of accepting the
news
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 between
Canada
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 and
Australia
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.
It is clear that
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 the largest numbers of
people
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 are using online resources to access
news
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 in
Australia
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, and
TV
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 is the most popular way
of
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for
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 Canadians to accept
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news
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the news
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.
By contrast
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,
people
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 who go
through
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to
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radio
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the radio
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getting
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to get
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news
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 are the lowest figure in these two countries. Approximately 52% of Australians use the internet to get information and the
TV
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 is not far behind (37%).
Also
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, the total percentage of
people
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 using
TV
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 and the internet receiving
news
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 is approximately 90%.
By contrast
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, the most welcome method of accessing the
news
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 in
Canada
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 is
TV
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, at 40% which is followed closely by
internet
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the internet
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 (36%). Actually, in these two countries, the proportion of
people
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 who choose television is roughly equal. The percentage of
people
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 who use
radio
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the radio
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 to get
news
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 in
Canada
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 (7%) has tripled in
Australia
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 (2%). And, the proportion of
people
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 using print (14%) to get information in
Canada
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 is twice as high as the proportion in
Australia
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 (7%).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "by contrast".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words news, canada, australia, people, tv with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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