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Some people think that books should be stopped in school and that video films and computers should be used instead. To what extent do you agree?

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In education, until recently
books
 are used because these
books
 were developed and recommended by pedagogical experts
such
 as scholars.At the same ,time the demand for
books
 seems to be low due to the practical application of computers and video films in educating children. But the facts I cite now show just how much
books
 are needed in education. It is inevitable that there are no risks which teaching with
books
. Because
books
 are scheduled and written according to the age of the children. That’s why there is no 18+content.
In addition
, using
books
 does not lead to financial and health problems. Because the government can not provide each classroom with a TV set and internet and teaching in a book is much better for health than teaching on the phone. Another important aspect is that it is very effective for preschoolers to teach in
books
 because they cannot teach online.
On the other hand
, teaching children with video films and computers can provide their imagination or their desire for knowledge. And if the lessons are group work and teacher-led lessons, the risks in the system are significantly reduced.To supplement for assimilating knowledge independent learning, the teacher needs to put guided learning in a good way and
also
 communicate with young people and control their flow, because young people can
also
 use bad content on the internet. Overall, it appears that of course,
books
, with their quality and depth, have always been approved by parents. I agree that there will always be a place for
books
 in education, despite the many benefits of the internet.
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