Some people believe that travelling is a valuable experience; others say it is a waste of time and money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

As an outcome of rapidly growing globalization, in the contemporary world, travelling has become more available, compared to previous centuries.A few
people
argue that short trips provide valuable experience in life,
whereas
, a few other dissidents bring forward the notion that it is a very
time
-consuming and expensive action.
This
essay will discuss both views in detail and,
also
explain why I believe an international journey is necessary. First and foremost, it is often believed that several soft skills,
such
as sociability, will be gathered
while
going to foreign countries, which may not be possible if
people
merely stay in their own countries.In fact, communicating with a person, who possesses a different language and culture will help in self-development, and gain an opportunity to learn them visually.
In addition
, taking trips overseas will broaden the mindset and establish global citizens' qualities.
For instance
, it has been noticed that individuals, who travel a lot can accept other cultures and religions effortlessly. In
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that travelling abroad
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a lot of
time
and more financial investment.
Firstly
,the famous tourist spots charge a huge amount for flight tickets,accommodation and food,
therefore
, an immense amount of money is needed.
For example
, rental apartments for a short period of
time
are in high demand, so, it is more expensive.
Secondly
,It takes plenty of
time
to find the best options , arrange everything prior to the journey, and explore the places.
As a result
, not many
people
can go on
such
trips
due to
heavy schedules.
To conclude
,an increasingly seen trend among today's generation is that they don't even waste the slightest chance to go overseas.
Although
some
people
believe that it wastes a lot of money and
time
, I strongly believe that the public can gain more benefits in terms of their behaviour.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broadens horizons
  • cultural exposure
  • tolerance
  • self-reliance
  • overcoming challenges
  • language proficiency
  • sustainable tourism
  • environmental footprint
  • cultural homogenization
  • commercialization
  • responsible travel
  • global understanding
  • eco-friendly practices
  • accessible alternatives
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