some people think that children should begin formal education at a very early age. others think they should begin after 7 years of age. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

A certain number of public believe that kids ought to be started normal subjects from the primary level
instead
of start since the age of 7.In my opinion, it is a ridiculous decision to put more pressure to learn when the
time
of play days, we will discuss more details in the following paragraphs.
First
and foremost, The scholar mental capacity develops very fastly in the occasion of below upper primary school level
therefore
, high-level teaching
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them more stress and it may affect their creativeness of mind.
Moreover
, they like to play a lot and
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them around
,
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really able to make them feels happy all
time
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For instance
, one of my friends' daughters named Sara, who just turns to 6 and
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to follow kids games and watch cartoons at most of the moment when I visited her home.
Secondly
, in
this
era, parents are
also
very much curious about them and most of the guardians do not push them to study a lesson
instead
of play
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time
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they have busy with their job or daily activities.
In addition
, it is very tough to catch higher-
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level
lessons for the little ones and it will not assist to polish their life.
On the other hand
, a small number of communities say that it is mandatory and
this
may help them to prepare themselves perfectly before
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school.
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point is some nations have been following
this
method to make them as
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from the lower level of classes.
For example
, in Japan,
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school management decided to implement
this
programme in 2007 but it has stopped
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because
of many negative
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children's
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physical ability. In conclusion, there are several positive sides
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after seven and many negative sides before the age to start education system. In my
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opinion
, as I said earlier kids must enjoy the
time
of their play days before the age of 7.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive development
  • social skills
  • lifelong love for learning
  • undue pressure
  • young minds
  • emotionally and socially
  • less structured environment
  • play-based learning
  • crucial
  • long-term academic performance
  • well-being
  • balancing early education
  • flexibility
  • best approach
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