You have visited another city in your country. Prior to the visit you requested some information from a tourist centre, but the information was incorrect. Write a letter to the manager of the centre and say - What information were you looking for? - What was incorrect in it? - What happened to you because of it.

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Dear Mr Ranjeet, My name is John Mayor. I recently visited Ahmedabad. Before visiting the city,

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had requested some

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from your tourist

center

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reagrding

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regarding

the heritage walk. I am writing

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letter to you, in regards to the

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provided by your centre to me.

Firstly

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, I would like to thank you for providing the

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in a very short time frame. Based on the

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provided by your centre,

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planned my entire visit.

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would like to draw to your attention that, some of the

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provided regarding the time and

loaction

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location

for the start of

heritage

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walk was incorrect. The

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shared had details about the walk starting from Sabarmati Ashram whereas it started from Siddi Saiyed.

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, it was stated that the walk starts at 8AM,

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, it started at 7AM. We missed the morning heritage walk and we had to plan for

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walk.

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created

alot

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a lot

of confusion and due to which we had to change our other following plans. The tourist centre has moral duty to should share

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relevant

correct

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with the travellers. The misleading

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causes

inconvinience

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inconvenience

and

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results in loss of time.

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should be avoided

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benefit

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of all. In

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conclusion

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would request you to kindly share precise data and provide

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the contact

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better communication in future. Thank you and Regards. John Mayor

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

234 words

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It is important for all towns and cities to have large public outdoor places like squares and parks. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people say that universities should only offer places to young students with the highest marks, while others say they should accept people of all ages, even if they did not do well at school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.