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Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes, and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is sometimes argued that parents should give permissions to their
children
 to let them
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 on their daily matters.
However
, others have a different idea, and they believe it will result in
children
to be
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 self centered. In
this
 essay, I will discuss that both sides of the argument and give my own opinion. On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons that we should encourage
children
 to make decisions by themselves. The main reason is that
children
 will feel happy if they are allowed to get whatever they want. Through parents always want to give their
children
 the best thing, sometimes, they do not know what kids really want.
Therefore
, letting
children
 decide what that want can solve
this
 problem. Another reason is that
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letting
children
 decide what they want can reduce waste.
For example
, if parents prepared some food
to
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 their
children
 without consulting
children
's ideas,
children
 may not be
intersted
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interested
 in eating them. As the result, the food will be wasted.
On the other hand
, allowing kids to make
choice
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on
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 all their personal
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lives
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 can cause them to be selfish.
Children
 who get used to
make
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choises
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choices
 on all matters will feel
unconfotable
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uncomfortable
 towards other people's suggestions and feedbacks. It will
result
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 them
to
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only care their
onw
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own
one
on
intersts
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interests
 during their
decison
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decision
makeing
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making
 process. In conclusion, there are many
benifits
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benefits
 to letting
children
 decide on their daily matters, while it can cause
children
 to be
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 when they are transited into society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomy
  • Consequence-awareness
  • Self-centered
  • Informal decision-making education
  • Child development
  • Age-appropriate choices
  • Cognitive growth
  • Fostering independence
  • Parental guidance
  • Societal norms
  • Interpersonal consideration
  • Balance of freedom
  • Individualism versus collectivism
  • Experience-based learning
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