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today, majority of children are raised by their grandparents due to the fact that their parents are busy working. To what extent do you think it affects the whole family?

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, as they might teach or say to the
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 something is not good for them.
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, some studies show the effects on the
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, Spending
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 they might face in the future. In conclusion,
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 play an important role when they
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 with their
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 as it will improve and enhance their skills.
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