Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. However, some people think other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, many countries
beleive
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that the
economic
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considered
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to be a cornerstone for the government.
However
, Other
people
may claim that there are other
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much important than the financial part. In my opinion, I personally believe that raising the
economy
in the country is essential to offer lots of service seeking the future life. Generally, government tend to
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a balance between the financial part and other services. Progression in the
economy
might provide services
such
as cinema, coffee, shopping mall and etc. The main reason to support
this
claim is that
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solutions for the investment. If the government
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an effort to aid poor
people
, they may enhance different
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in the city.
For example
,
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people
suffering from the decreasing of the
economy
.
However
,
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majority of
people
suffering from increasing the
economy
as it is not affordable for them to live.
In other words
, raising
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the
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prices make these
people
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lots of issues in their daily life.
For instance
,
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Egyptian
people
have
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number of them facing
difficulities
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difficulties
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in the food. In conclusion,
although
increasing poverty in many countries,
acheiving
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achieving
best
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economic
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could be
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of providing various services for the citizen.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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