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In many countries today, the eating habit and lifestyle of children are different from those of previous generations. Some are of the opinion that this had negative effects on their health. What is your opinion? Do you agree or disagree with this idea.

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There is no doubt that these days, a large number of countries based on fossil
fuels
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, coal, oil, natural gas to produce
energy
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, but there are a few states using natural
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 as wind
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 as well as solar
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, I fully agree
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 a positive development, I would discuss the benefit of using alternative
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 .
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 with, Using renewable
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 would save our earth from the high temperatures which is the main issue in the world l, to Illustrate, many of the nations are using clean
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, in transport and at home as well as charging own cars, it would reduce co2 in the air, according to a recent study in the UK majority of state started to use green
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 than fossil
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, embracing renewable resources will boost the economy. Unlike, fossil
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, which are unevenly distributed, almost all regions have the access to green
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sources
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 in abundance. Many nations will be reducing their dependence on imported
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 and can produce cost-effective
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 for their in-house consumption.
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, if India promotes solar-powered automobiles, dependency on the middle east to import high-priced oil and gas would be significantly reduced.
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, with these renewable
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 being boundless, long-term jobs are generated in manufacturing, engineering and installation, abating the problem of unemployment considerably while contributing to the improvement of the nation’s economy. To conclude, it is a constructive step towards ecological well-being with some countries using renewable
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sources
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 of fossil material.
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, experts associated with these eco-friendly
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 technologies should be shared worldwide, so that, efforts are made at a global level.
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