Some people think that environment problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

in recent decades,environmental
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have become a disaster for
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world.in that
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human beings live is in danger in
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way.some individuals argue that that matter should be solved
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scale .while some commentators believe that each nation should find out their own solution.
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,as we shall see now. on the one hand,some environmental problems are discovered as
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global one which means nations can not solve it by themselves because it depends on the various elements
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ozone
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ozon
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ozone
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earth
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from
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s dangerous components which are impact on human s skin and bring lots of
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diseased
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s skins are contagious. so it is a
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for humans.
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, the expenditure of global
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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