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Smacking is the best form of discipline to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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behavior
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 is a
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,which is lead to
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learn
 how to treat
with
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others
beacuse
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because
 It is reported that family is the most important place
from
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where
children
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 can practice discipline and
well-manners
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.
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,teaching regulation to the
children
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 crashing is not
great
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a great
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 way.I am completely in
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disagreement
 with that smacking is not
best
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 path to
controlled
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.To Illustrate
that
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.sacking has
great
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 impact on
children
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 mental health and it might be
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the causes
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causes
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cause
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 of
children
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behaviors
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behaviours
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. To commence with,In our society family play vital role to controlled young people
becasse
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because
 within a certain ages
familty
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family
 look after them closely.
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,
practicing
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 rule in
family
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the family
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 from early
stag
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stage
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 is
most
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the most
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 common picture in
the
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society.most of the
times
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time
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family
familty
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the familty
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 want to
controlled
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 them by
stricking
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striking
sticking
.
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,Apurbo,thirteen years of age who read in class eight his mom
alway
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always
 try to
controlled
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 him by smacking.
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, he got mental depression which
reflected
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 in his study.
On the other hand
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, guidances, who try to make controlled and teach them well-manner by applying strict way which
also
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 has negative aspects.
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,Arnoob teenager,who is fifteen years of age his father often bits him even if he do little
mistake
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.
Moreover
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, he could not express his intention and rights because of his father ill-temper.
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, he has trackless and gets addicted to evil companies. To sum up,To improve and teach well-manner to the
children
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 family should take initiative for showing flexible
behavior
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behaviour
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 to them
otherwise
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 they would be out of reach.
furthermore
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,to protect them from mental depression family should not
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 them.
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