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Some people think that it is important for nurses to have medical knowledge. Others think that other qualities are important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Most communities say differently about assistants' wisdom. The majority of people think the nurse need to have the know-how of medicine. Others,
however
, do not believe
this
 statement and they think attendant' science is not important. I will explain
this
 in an essay. On the one hand, the nurses' pill power is very important to our life. Because attendant' job is very difficult and competent educated of pharmaceutical for keep human well-being. Really, nowadays, in our earth have a lot of sick public and they ill've are very dangerous. For
this
 , disease ,prevention the medical workers need to an observation about medication. But sone medic know the prescription theory, other assistants do not know medical education than the public fitness once more get improved.
On the other hand
, nations believe therapists' education in drugs is needless. Because ,medicare ,not doctors, help the scientist and they assist the ill nations. Sometimes the assistant gives the family an injection and they drive away drops for the sick community. Especially, attendants work in the hospital, they assist the physician and they do what the surgeon says and do not need any science or experience for
such
 work. On the whole, registered nurse jobs are not easy , the jobs are very difficult in comparison to the surgeon. Because keeping family healthy of the population depends primarily on qualified doctors and registered nurses, their ignorance worsens the fitness of the population.
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