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A friend from another coutry moving to your city for work. he asked you to advise about living in your city. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter 1. suggest an interesting part of the city to live in. 2. describe the public transport in your city. 3. say how your friend can meet new people there.

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Dear John, I hope
this
 letter finds you well and happy. It has been a
while
 since we see each other. I am very happy about your decision to move to New York, you should have decided earlier, but I am glad you
finally
 did. As you know the Big Apple has a lot of districts, and most of them are very expensive. I do not know how big your budget is, but if I were you I would definitely try to find a small apartment in Brooklyn first.
This
 neighbourhood is very nice and close to Manhattan,
furthermore
 is much cheaper. In my opinion, you should not worry about public transport, the city has a perfect underground train system. You will get without any problems to every important part of the city in less than 30 minutes.
Moreover
, the payment system is very straightforward and intuitive. There is no need to worry about buying any extra cards or tickets, you only need a mobile application with a payment card. New York is a very diverse city, you can meet people from around the world, and most of them are very friendly and nice.
Additionally
, people here are very open, and they love spending time together, so I am absolutely sure you will make new friends very fast. Look forward to hearing from you Best wishes, George
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task achievement
While the letter covers all the key points, consider adding more specific details or examples to make your suggestions more vivid and useful. For instance, mention a specific area within Brooklyn or highlight a particular public transport route that might be especially convenient.
coherence cohesion
To further enhance coherence, you could add transitional phrases or sentences that connect the paragraphs more smoothly. For instance, use phrases like 'Speaking of which' or 'As for meeting new people' to create a more fluid progression between ideas.
suitable writing tone
The letter maintains a friendly and conversational tone throughout, which is very appropriate given the context of writing to a friend.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, making the information clear and easy to follow.
logical structure
The letter has a logical structure with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
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