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It is argued that getting married before finishing school or getting a job is not a good choice. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#school #job #choice
People have always wondered about the best age for getting married, which has
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 it should be before graduating from school or even finding a career. I personally believe the personal development of the individual is what should be taken into account.
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Firstly
, a vast majority of persons argue that it is absolutely indispensable to finish your studies at university and follow it by looking for a profession.
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, one must put a great deal of effort into developing his interpersonal as well as business skills to pave the way for his success.
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, despite the fact that loneliness can hinder you from concentrating on work-related issues, the vital role of studying a rewarding and practical major at university cannot be overlooked.
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, an isolated worker who suffers from depression cannot own a healthy relationship.
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, the opponents of the former idea state that marriage relies neither on academic qualifications nor on having a source of income.
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, having enough experience to combat real-life struggles is what determines your readiness for getting married.
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, a man in his mid-twenties can be more mature than someone who is an adult but just owning a university degree or a well-paid job.
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 wisdom and emotional intelligence should be the top-drawer personality traits for a functional marriage. On the whole, even though marrying an unemployed partner who has no source of revenue can be detrimental and dysfunctional, it does not merely depend on money, and you should flourish characteristically and mentally to lead a healthy life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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