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25. Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to poorer countries rather than financial aid. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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The poorer
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' economic crisis has now become a hot topic in every discussion forum in developed
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.
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result
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, rich
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 frequently provide financial
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 to them in
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 to cover their expenditures while
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 intending to solve their problems. It does not,
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, always shed light on
poverty
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. I agreed with the statement made.
This
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 essay will discuss how developed
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 should give their resources to poorer
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 in
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 for them to overcome.
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 with, it is undeniable that the number of resources required to drive the country has increased dramatically in recent decades.
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, when seeking financial
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 from the wealthiest
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, these poor
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 frequently extend their hands.
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,
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 does not always
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 in a solution.
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result
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, I believe that developed
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 should establish factories or manufacturing plans in developing
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 in
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 to boost their economies by creating a large number of job opportunities. These results will not be visible in a short period of time, but they will be beneficial for a longer period of time.
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, if the country has a high level of unemployment, financial aid from developed
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 will not be sufficient to alleviate
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.
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, if the country is experiencing a decrease in agricultural production due to crop quality, economic
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 will be ineffective in alleviating
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. The developed
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 should transport their prestigious seeds to them in
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 to increase their production ratio.
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, in some cases, money is simply a tool that can assist poorer
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 in overcoming
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. A good example to demonstrate my point is that during the Covid pandemic, many
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 sought financial
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 from developed
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 to cover their expenses. To conclude, I believe that rich
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 must assist poorer
countries
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 in creating job opportunities, providing food and medicine, rather than simply providing financial aid.
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  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
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