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Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others,however , say that this would have little effect on pyblic health and that other measures are required. Discuss both views and give your opinoin

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Despite the fact that it has been pointed out by some that constructing more
sports
facilities
 is the best means to enhance
health
conditions
 for every single person, other
people
 argue that the increase in the number of
sports
equipment
 has no influence on public
health
, and several other approaches should be implemented. Personally, I completely agree with the latter opinion as
sports
facilities
 cannot benefit every resident. On the one hand, some individuals believe that the increasing number of
sports
facilities
 is beneficial to public
health
conditions
. The reason is that if more
sports
 infrastructures have been constructed in most parts of a city, it
is
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 easy and convenient for residents to do exercise. Participating in physical activities can enhance the immune system and help
people
 to build a strong body, which lowers the risks of catching several illnesses, contributing to the improvement of
physical
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 well-being of every person.
For instance
, in Shanghai, the local government has invested a great deal of money to construct
sports
equipment
 in every community. One officer of a local hospital
say
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 that they treat fewer patients with
life threatening
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 situations now as the authorities persuade
people
 to do exercise with those new
sports
facilities
.
On the other hand
, other
people
, including me, suggest that the construction of
sports
facilities
 has limitations, and other measures should be considered.
This
 is because
although
 public leaders spend a vast amount of money building
sports
equipment
, a vast majority of individuals who have
a
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busy working lives and other commitments are less likely to take part in
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a workout
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workout
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 to improve their
health
conditions
.
As a result
 of
this
 circumstance, a vast majority of inhabitants still have dreadful physical well-being.
For example
, a huge number of office workers who need to work overtime
every day
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 state that there
are
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is
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 a wide range of
sports
facilities
 in the public area of their apartment buildings, while they are still suffering from digestive
issue
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 and insomnia since it is particularly tough to them to spare a moment to do exercise. In conclusion,
people
 may vary in their opinion about whether building a countless proportion of
sports
equipment
 can enhance the physical
conditions
 of every person or not, while I am of the opinion that other approaches should be taken into account as
this
 method has the drawback and cannot improve every citizen’s physical well-being.
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