Some people think that travelling abroad is necessary while others believe it's not because TV and the Internet can give people the same information. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
People
have different opinions about travelling to other countries. Some groups of people
believe that it is necessary to travel abroad, while
another group do not agree with it, as people
get such
types of data from different resources such
as TV, Internet
and so on. Correct article usage
the Internet
Although
it is possible to access to the various parts of the world via devices
and networks. However
, i
consider that it is not an alternative to travelling. There are various reasons why many Change the capitalization
I
people
prefer to travelChange preposition
to
information
from electronic devices
. Secondly
, these devices
are limiting
the vision of view, Wrong verb form
limit
while
if you want to get detailed information
about any country, such
as local people
, meals, climate, customs and traditions, but you can not taste it or it is impossible to observe these people
or their customs. At
Rephrase
Finally
last
, I believe that long journeys are not only appropriate for obtaining information
about somewhere but also
meant to be amusing events, different tours, new friendships, new
tastes. Correct word choice
and new
On the other hand
, there are justified reasons for themself who support travelling abroad is unimportant. Primarily, theyAdd a missing verb
are
this
idea that all Correct determiner usage
the
information
is accessible with the
electronic Correct article usage
apply
devices
. Then
, there is the main issue is that,
trips to another country Remove the comma
apply
is
very costly and there are difficulties Change the verb form
are
such
as to get
a visa, Change the verb form
getting
to book
a ticket, to Change the verb form
booking
reserve
a hotel room Wrong verb form
reserving
on the contrary
there is no additional cost for getting data from TV or Internet. In conclusion, although
, it might seem achievable for everyoneFix the infinitive
to
devices
for travelling, but
I personally prefer visiting abroad Remove the conjunction
apply
for
the intention Change preposition
with
to gain
real pleasure.Change preposition
of gaining
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