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The best way to solve world's environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Recently, the transportation system has been blamed to be the main factor causing
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pollution
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. To solve
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 problem, some people suggested increasing the
price
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 of
fuels
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. In my opinion,
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 measure is ineffective to tackle th
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en
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pollution
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 and there are more suitable solutions to
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, increasing the cost of
fuels
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 can’t
decrease
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t.
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The world’s transport system depends heavily on fossil
fuels
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 to run, so a higher
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 for diesel oil and gas won’t
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 the need of
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t. The toxic chemicals emission will remain the same, and the
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ituation won’t get any better.
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, our government has increased the
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 of oil and gas significantly over the
last
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 decade, but because of the popularity of private vehicles in our country, the sales of these two types of energy has not
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crease.
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When it comes to ta
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h
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pollution
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, there are more practical solutions than increasing the
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 of
fuels
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.
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, we can shift our use of fossil
fuels
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 to a more eco-friendly alternative. Electric and su
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re two possible so
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f energy that can replace oil and gas. They are more sustainable, less expensive and don’t harm th
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ture. If these sources of energy get more popular, it can have a positive effect on tackling th
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pollution
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, citizens should use more public transportation to reduce the chemicals emission from cars.
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 measure will significantly
decrease
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 the amount of carbon dioxide in the air, leaving a fresher atmosphere for people. In conclusion, increasing the
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 of
fuels
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 isn’t a suitable solution to the current
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pollution
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 situation.
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se of eco-friendly
fuels
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 and a better public transportation system ar
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em t
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o be more effective solutions
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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