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The best way to solve world's environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Recently, the transportation system has been blamed to be the main factor causing
en
vironment
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pollution
. To solve
this
 problem, some people suggested increasing the
price
 of
fuels
. In my opinion,
this
 measure is ineffective to tackle th
e
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en
vironment
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pollution
 and there are more suitable solutions to
this
 problem
Firstly
, increasing the cost of
fuels
 can’t
decrease
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i
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t.
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The world’s transport system depends heavily on fossil
fuels
 to run, so a higher
price
 for diesel oil and gas won’t
decrease
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i
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t. The toxic chemicals emission will remain the same, and the
en
vironment s
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ituation won’t get any better.
For example
, our government has increased the
price
 of oil and gas significantly over the
last
 decade, but because of the popularity of private vehicles in our country, the sales of these two types of energy has not
de
crease.
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When it comes to ta
ckle t
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h
e
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en
vironment
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pollution
, there are more practical solutions than increasing the
price
 of
fuels
.
Firstly
, we can shift our use of fossil
fuels
 to a more eco-friendly alternative. Electric and su
n-energy a
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re two possible so
urce o
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f energy that can replace oil and gas. They are more sustainable, less expensive and don’t harm th
e na
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ture. If these sources of energy get more popular, it can have a positive effect on tackling th
e
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en
vironment
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pollution
.
Secondly
, citizens should use more public transportation to reduce the chemicals emission from cars.
This
 measure will significantly
decrease
 the amount of carbon dioxide in the air, leaving a fresher atmosphere for people. In conclusion, increasing the
price
 of
fuels
 isn’t a suitable solution to the current
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vironment
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pollution
 situation.
Instead
, th
e u
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they
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se of eco-friendly
fuels
 and a better public transportation system ar
e se
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em t
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seen
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o be more effective solutions
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