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In some countries, owning a house rather than renting one is more important for people. Why must be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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It is very crucial for people to own a
house
 than to rent in some countries.
This
 case may be due to the privacy and saving money for renting. In my opinion, I believe it
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 more advantage because owning property is the best investment
for
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a
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 long run.
Firstly
, buying
house
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 is predominant over renting is simply to save money over
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 long term. To be precise, buying a
house
 with
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 mortgage instalment
instead
 of paying
rental
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 fee for accommodation will be better for some people.
Secondly
, being a
house
 owner is more important since it
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 more privacy as there is no need to share
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personal information with
stranger
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.
For instance
, tenant's particulars and supporting documents have to provide to the landlords in prefer to rent
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accommodation. That means that the particular were exposed to other every time signing the rental agreement. In my view, there are more positive impacts on owning a
house
 rather than renting because buying a home can be an investment.
In other words
, property prices usually increased over time and it has been accounted for
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 of the best
investment
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 in some countries. Another benefit of being a
house
 owner is that can be able to decorate the interior to suit
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personal preferences as the home become a reflection of the residences and
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 place for them to relax. In conclusion, many people prefer buying to renting a home to save money for
future
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 and to keep their identities from strangers. From my point of view, belonging
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 accommodation would be
benifical
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beneficial
 as it can be investing on poverty and
also
 be able to renovate as your style.
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