Nowadays, more and more people are emigrating from developing countries to developed countries. What the causes of this trend are and how it could be mitigated?

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Immigration
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from less developed
countries
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to developed
countries
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is increasing more each day.
Reason
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of
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for
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this
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trend is, facilities of developed
countries
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, life expectancy in developed
countries
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and
job
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opportunities
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. To mitigate
this
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problem
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countries
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should hold each other's hand and start to
aid
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and build up less developed
areas
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.
Immigration
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from lowly developed
areas
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to highly developed
countries
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usually happens because there are no
job
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opportunities
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in low developed
countries
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.
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of no
job
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opportunities
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people
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suffer from
lack
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a lack
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of money. They cannot do shopping,
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result
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the economy doesn't grow in these
countries
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. Due to the poor economy and economic facilities, the education
system
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stays unqualified.
Unqualified
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An unqualified
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education
system
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raises untalented individuals. Untalented individuals do not
succee
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succeed
in creating work
opportunities
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and do not become successful in their work life.
Health
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The Health
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system
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in less developed
countries
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is another issue.
People
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who live in non-grown
areas
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usually have a hard time reaching medical
aid
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and health care.
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,
people
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cannot get the right treatment because one doctor would have to take care of many patients. To mitigate
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immigration
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problem
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, developed nations should come together and start a project to advance non-developed
areas
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.
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Immigration
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The immigration
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problem
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shall be carried to the United Nations and should become
a
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the
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main topic. Educational reform should be done in non-developed
countries
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. Professional teachers should be imported from greater
countries
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to educate individuals. Economical
aid
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should be done to less advanced states and these
countries
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should be supported in the global market.
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, medical supply will be helpful to these
countries
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.
Medical
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The medical
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system
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should be reorganized
by
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the help of greater states and new hospitals should be built. In conclusion, more
people
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are immigrating from less developed states to developed ones.
Wave
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A wave
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of
immigration
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has many reasons. It's mostly caused because
life
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living
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standards are really low in non-developed
countries
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and
people
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have no
job
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opportunities
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.
Deficiency
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The deficiency
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of the education and health
system
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is another cause of
immigration
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. To solve
this
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problem
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, developed
countries
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should hold the hands of less developed
countries
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. Medical, economical and educational
aid
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should be done to these
countries
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.
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