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Some people believe that women should be able to join their country’s army and police forces. Others think that only men should be allowed to work in these areas. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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According to some,
women
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 have to serve alongside
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men in an
army
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 and to work in
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police
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the police
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, because all of them are equal citizens of their country and should give back their duty. Whereas others think that
women
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 are too delicate and weak, and the government should not put them in
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such
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 danger. Personally, I think that both genders should have the opportunity to join an
army
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,
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 because it is fair. To start with, those who are against
women
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 working in dangerous areas often say that
female’s
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females’
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 mentality is unstable, and they are emotional. In a sudden stressful situation,
women
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 will not think straight and may act
illogical
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.
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,
police
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 and
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army
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 may hurt
women
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’s reproductive health due to
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 physical and psychological loads during service.
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, according to the results of the research of the Moscow
Police
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 Academy held in 2018, 40% of
women
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 has
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a reaction
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 to
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external irritants more unexpected than men’s one.
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, around 30% of policewomen do not want to have a child after seeing cruelty in the sphere of criminality.
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, in some countries,
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 as Israel,
women
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 have been an integral part of an
army
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, as well as
police
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 structures for a lot of years already. The government is sure, that males and females are equally obligated to help and to protect their motherland from enemies.
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, based on Israeli
women
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’s words, serving in an
army
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 is an
honor
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.
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, retired citizens may count on getting a prestigious job. There are some
females
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female
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squad
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squads
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 in the Russian forces as well. During the annual parade on May 9, they are given special attention and
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 highly
honored
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. In conclusion, I believe that joining an
army
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 should be possible for everyone, who are ready to serve. Despite some arguments and limitations, more and more countries accept females in
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