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Some people think traveling abroad is necessary, while others think it is not necessary because TV and the Internet can give the same information. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many people think that travelling is the most advantageously way to learn some things new.
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, others think contrary so, they suggest that TV and the Internet have given same the information. Before expressing my own opinion, let's look at the explanations of both sides in more detail. The people who, advocate the view watching TV and the internet are much better than going abroad give some coherent argument.
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 of all, the technology is chipper than going somewhere so, travelling is not accessible for everyone because everyone has not enough money for going abroad. The
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 main factor is travelling is spending lots of time and energy.
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, estimated time en route sometimes resembles torture for tourists. Another factor is that travelling is a risky way of learning new things because every year lots of people are dying or injured on occasion.
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, others, including me, support the idea any action can not replace travelling
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 because watching TV and the Internet are belong to others' experiences. Everyone has a unique journey knowledge,
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, going abroad gives us an unforgettable when you have your own experience. Another main factor travelling abroad give us new acquaintance which it is the best way to understand the country tradition, history and psychology. All in all, both sides have good reasons for travelling experience. Technologies are the easiest and chipset action for learning other countries and nations features.
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, we have never gained real-life experience like travelling abroad experiences.
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, I would like to point out we should utilize both sides beneficially,
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 , before going abroad we research features of peace on the social networks.

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