Your workplace does not have a parking area for cars, and it is causing some problems. Write a letter to your manager and include the following: – Describe the problems it has caused. – Explain what benefits a parking area would bring to the company. – Suggest a solution.
I am Robinson Crew, the new asset manager who recently joined your company. I am writing to let you know that our unit doesn't have a dedicated parking
space
for our staff
members, while
other units do, which is really inconvenient on a daily basis. Parking every day at the public parking which is located 2km away from the office costs 900$ per month for each of our staff
members and it takes unnecessary
waste of time for them to reach the office.
Let me explain the advantages of a designated parking Add an article
the unnecessary
space
. Firstly
, it could help to save money spent on public parking while
improving the punctuality of our staff
. Secondly
, the designated space
will be free from theft and other incidents due to
the fact that it is only reserved for our members. In addition
, the designated space
is legally enforced to be continuously monitored by security cameras which could provide evidence, if any incidents happen causing potential damage to the vehicles which isn't the case in public parking.
The church near our office is a safe space
for our staff
to park and a monthly payment which is cheaper than the public parking might help to maintain the infrastructure of the area which is currently being used for practising dance and music for children from kindergarten. I hope you will consider my suggestion positively.
Thanks again for your kind consideration
Thanks,
RobinsonSubmitted by onlineconsumer on
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coherence and cohesion
Consider introducing a brief paragraph layout to enhance the logical flow of information regarding the problems faced and potential solutions.
task achievement
Proofread for minor errors to ensure clarity and professionalism.
task achievement
The letter comprehensively explained the issues faced due to the absence of parking and correctly identified potential benefits of having a parking area.
suitable writing tone
The letter maintained a polite and formal tone appropriate for communication with a manager.
greeting and closing
Good use of greeting and closing, maintaining a professional manner throughout.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.