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Some people think that the best way to reduce the time spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays
 whether replacing
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 with accommodation buildings in
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center
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areas
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 could be beneficial in reducing commuting time has become a controversial topic. From my perspective, having more living
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instead
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 should be considered in order to reduce commuting spendings.
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 of all, recreation
facilities
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such
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 and
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 have occupied spaces that would have been utilized for residential use around downtown
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. As consequence, there will be limited space for buildings, which led to high costs in real estate around central business districts, Residents in the
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 may seek more reasonable prices of housing in suburban which takes longer time to commute to study or work.
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, funds for local infrastructure maintenance came from tax revenue that governments could have used to build more affordable condos and apartments for citizens near downtown
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.
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, the voices of removing
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 and
gardens
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 are understandable. With the destruction of these
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, civilians would lose
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 spaces for recreation and relaxation.
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,
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 and
parks
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 could add beautiful sceneries to towns or cities.
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, having affordable accommodation
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 would be more significant to the public. Governments should consider removing some
parks
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 and
gardens
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 and constructing more affordable apartments
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 in these
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. By taking
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 action, citizens would gain more freedom in choosing living locations. In conclusion,
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parks
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 and
gardens
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 are an inseparable part of the
city
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, the growing advocation of having more affordable places to live in CBD
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 has become unignorable. For
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 reason, governments should take action to replace some of the
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 and
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 with living
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • commuters
  • urban areas
  • housing availability
  • alleviating housing crises
  • public transport
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental health
  • biodiversity
  • recreational
  • mental health benefits
  • urban heat islands
  • green lungs
  • community interaction
  • cohesion
  • innovative urban planning
  • multi-use buildings
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