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People think that the government should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles to solve environmental problems. Give your opinion

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In my opinion, the
government
 should increase the cost of
fuel
 for vehicles to solve environmental problems
such
 as air pollution and traffic on the roads. Nowadays, Cars become one of the important things in our day-to-day lifestyle,
instead
 of driving two-wheelers
people
 prefer to drive four-wheelers for nearby locations because they feel a
car
 is safer than bikes. Since
,
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 we have gas stations side-by-side it's convenient to travel
in
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car
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a car
the car
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 with family everywhere along with language. In case,
government
 increase the petrol
price
, there
are
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 some chance to solve environmental problems.
Although
,
people
 who travel to office daily should start using vehicles like cycle if it's nearby. Whereas
,
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 riding cycle will help to improve our health rather driving cars,
however
, if it's a walkable distance
then
 walking to the workplace is advisable so that they can bypass wasting time in traffic.
On the other hand
, if the
government
 raises the
fuel
 cost
then
 there will be some impact on
car
 manufacturing companies. It seems to me that,
fuel
price
 is directly propositional to
car
 company because if there is
a
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 increase in the
price
 of gas
then
 buying cars will automatically get reduced.
For instance
, we may expect
people
 to prefer a cycle for the accessible location which is good for their health as well. To my mind, environmental problems
such
 as traffic, accidents can be solved by raising the
price
 of petrol, diesel and gas.
Government
 should think and act
accordingly
, unless there are some strict rules and regulations that have been issued by the
government
people
 will not change on their own.
Hence
, to control atmosphere air pollution
fuel
 cost
raise
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 is mandatory by the
government
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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