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Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others,however , say that this would have little effect on pyblic health and that other measures are required. Discuss both views and give your opinoin

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There are argumentative issues among people about boosting public health.Some of them
beleive
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believe
 that constructing multiple
sports
 sections is very useful,while others say that it isn't and other numerous measures should be installed.
This
 essay will discuss both views and explain my own opinion. On one side of the argument,there are people who argue that the number of
sports
 facilities leads
citizins
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citizens
 to go
to
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there and it makes them be healthy and fit.
For example
,if there is a gym or swimming pool nearby your neighbourhood,it is convenient for you
attending
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 there early in the mornings or after work in the evenings. Others,
however
,think that erecting numerous
sports
 facilities isn't enough and it demands quite more finance to build and maintain them. They prefer to introduce awareness programs
which
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 promote consuming healthy food,
instead
 of fast-food or
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junk food
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junk-food
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junk food
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.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,smoking and drinking
alchohol
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alcohol
are
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 impacting badly
to
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 our healthy lifestyle. So,to diminish the
numbers
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 of drunks and smokers,the government should impose on shops,which sells alcohol and smoking products by forcing them to pay more taxes. In conclusion,increasing
sports
 buildings can be the best way evolving people's health,but in my
opinion
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 intaking
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healthy
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heathy
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healthy
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 food and reducing the trade of cigarettes and alcohol products are much more effective than erecting a lot of
sports
 facilities.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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