Practice 1: You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to the course tutor. In your letter, •describe the situation •explain why you cannot continue at this time •say what action you would like to take You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any ad

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Hello teacher Osama , I am sorry I want to cancel the course because

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don't have enough time now ,But I hope in future I will join again in your course again .

firstly

, I have a problem with my budget I could not pay my flat rent ,

therefore

I was looking for a part-time job for five days and

then

finally

I found a good job and

also

well pay , So now I have full-time work starting at 8:00 AM until 4:00 PM ,

Also

the second job starting from 6:00 PM until 10:00 PM , i realized recently I can not join to your course .

Secondly

, When i pass the problem budget and if i got enough money , i would leave the part-time jop and study with again , I really want to study and improve my skill

However

i need to hard work now . Thank you , i'm looking forward to hearing back from you .

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Coherence and Cohesion

Consider organizing your ideas more clearly into separate paragraphs to enhance the logical structure and readability.

Coherence and Cohesion

Pay attention to punctuation and capitalization to improve the flow and professionalism of your letter.

Task Achievement

Provide a more detailed explanation about what specific action you would like the tutor to understand or take regarding your course cancellation.

Task Achievement

Your letter maintains a warm and respectful tone, appropriate for a letter to a course tutor.

Coherence and Cohesion

The greeting and closing of your letter are appropriately addressed.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

166 words

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