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In many nations around the world, declining health and a lack of fitness are becoming very common among people. There are a number of causes of this, but certain measures could be taken to alleviate this problem.

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The picture given illustrates the process of how ceramic
pots
 are manufactured. Overall, the process involves ten steps and two main phases, starting with
clay
 excavation, and culminating with heating the coloured
pots
. There are some steps that should be done before the
pots
 are moulded.
To begin
 with,
clay
 needs to be excavated from the ground by a digger and
then
 transfers to the factory.
This
clay
then
 is crushed in two different levels by two crushing machines to sift. After which, the sifted
clay
 will be mixed with water in order to make a homogenous paste. In the
second
 phase, the paste is poured into moulds in order to shape and dry, in about 4 to 6 hours.
This
 shaped
pots
 are heated in mould, at about 1000 Celsius to become hard. After that, the
pots
 are ready to be coloured, and
finally
, these ceramic
pots
 should be heated again in a colour firing machine.
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