Nowadays most green energy is becoming evermore prevalent in both developed and developing countries. Some argue they greatly reduce costs and are better for the environment, others believe they are a serious threat to energy security. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Recently, lots of sustainable power sources have become a common thing to have whether in developed or developing nations. Some would say it is beneficial for reducing costs and is more eco-friendly,
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others assume it can have a negative impact on
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availability.
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the latter opinion can be justified in some cases, I believe that the transition to sustainable
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is needed in today's world climate Fossil fuels are still considered the main source of
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used in our daily activities.
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, the amount of production is vital for the continuity in many industries.
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, the paper industry still uses coal as the main power source.
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, if the number of fuel productions is decreasing
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the price will become higher and can create more problems.
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,
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issue can be resolved by providing subsidies for the construction of sustainable power plants so that people will no longer
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on fossil fuels anymore. Nowadays, climate change is a topic that many countries discuss .
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, they created a new policy to reduce the amount of greenhouse gas emissions produced.
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, many companies already implemented
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regulation in their production process.
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, the cost can be minimalized and the daily activity of the population won't be affected by
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transition. In conclusion,
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it is important for nations to provide sufficient
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sources for their people to use, climate issues make the transition to environmentally friendly
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unavoidable.
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Work on expanding the vocabulary range to make your writing more varied and engaging.
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You’ve successfully covered both sides of the argument, which is essential for this type of essay.
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Good job including an introduction and a conclusion, which frame your essay well.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainable
  • Renewable energy sources
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Hydro energy
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Global warming
  • Climate change
  • Technology advancements
  • Economies of scale
  • Intermittent
  • Variable
  • Capital investment
  • Energy infrastructure
  • Energy storage technology
  • Energy supply
  • Energy security
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