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Some people prefer to spend more time improving their careers. Others think that it’s more important to spend time with family and friends. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #time #careers #it’s #friends
In today's
world
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 some people tend to change their attitude when it comes to social relations. There are lots of factors which can
depent
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depend
dependent
spent
 on that. Others will argue with the previous one that nothing is more significant than connection with other
humang
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human
humans
 beings.
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discusse
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discuss
 both sides before revealing
final
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 conclusion. It
widely known
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 that people need to
constanly
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constantly
 learn new things, in order to live
happy
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a happy
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 life and not to get bored.
As a
result
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 they want to be self-
suffitient
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sufficient
 and satisfied with their achievements. Sometimes their huge ambitions are so demanding, that they take their all time. We can not forget that everybody is different and so their needs, even though for some
this
 can look
as
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 a definition of
unhappienes
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unhappiness
, but for
others
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,others
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 money and work success can replace all human's interactions. What is
more
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 there is a very common
believe
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belief
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 that it is smarter to be
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financially
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financial
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secured
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 before having a family, in order to be able to provide
for instance
 better education for a future child. On the other side,
big
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 part of the world
believe
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 that money can not give you a worth life. For them only what
matter
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matters
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 are human
connetions
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connections
connection
. Having that said, relations with family and friends.
This
 wide group is convinced that at the end of the day everyone wants to feel loved and know that they can
unconditionaly
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unconditionally
 count on them. In order to have that, they need to build
a
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strong
fundaments
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 which
takes
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 time. To sum up, I believe that nothing can give more happiness
from
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to
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 living than other people. It is essential to be surrounded by supporting relatives who will eventually help you improve your working status.
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