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People are becoming dependent on the Internet and phone. Do the benefits of this outweigh the disadvantages.

#people #internet #phone #outweigh
The significant
number
 of tourists visiting a Caribbean island is demonstrated by the line graph
during
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 2010 to 2017. Overall, what stands out about the data is that both the
number
 of people whose destinations, which
visitors
 were staying had experienced
a
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sustainable climbing since 2010. From the figures in the line chart, one remarkable thing is that the substantial
number
 of
visitors
 staying on
island
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 had witnessed a steadily rising from 2011 to 2015, after which had been exceeded by the
number
 of
the
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visitors
 staying on cruise ships though. Another interesting thing is that
although
 the
number
 of
visitors
 staying on
island
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 had been presented slightly ascend (2010-2012), it began to dramatically rocket
during
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 2012 to 2017, which means tourists
more
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 likely to
staying
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 on cruise ships gradually.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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