2. We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is sometimes argued that everyone around the globe needs helps and we are not able to help it;

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because it brings a lot of advantages in medicine aspect. Obviously,

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improve in the medical aspect.

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that have modern science about medicine, so that they made types of vaccines to protect humans. In 2021, the UK give a large amount of AstraZeneca vaccine for Viet Nam, due to Vietnamese preventing covid-19.

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need helps from other richer

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because they do not look for any helps from their own

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. Illustrate, African

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face are many serious problems, and their government is

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cannot solve for people. There are children in Africa who do not have food to maintain their living,

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have a basic education system;

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, WHO in the world comes up with plans

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just help their own citizens, it could reduce opportunities to combine with other

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. It is clear that in aspects of a nation without any weak point,

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need cooperation from other

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help Vietnam in economic growth. In conclusion, some people think that we cannot help all people who need supports around the world so that we need to focus help of the nation that we are born and mature. I disagree with

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global interconnectivity
international cooperation
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