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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents for instance sports or music and others are not. however, it is sometimes claimed that any children can be thaught to become a good sports person or musician. discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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In recent times,it is commonly believed that some individuals are inborn with some natural abilities
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 sport or drama , while some people are claiming that if any
child
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 should be taught they
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 become a better sports person or musician. Both the aspects as well as my opinion can be justified in the
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 paragraphs. In the former view, some layman's have innate talents.
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 with,I believe that ,more or less it is because of genetics .
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, some traits are common between their parents and
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some talents are
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 passed from their parents. It is generally believed that if a father is a doctor
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 become the same. In the latter view, that some masses
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well-known people even if , they don't have talents. The reason behind
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 is that because some children have natural adaptability to learning new things
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, they have more capabilities than others to fit in any environment. For an instance, if parents are putting their
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 in music classes or else in the sports club ,
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, with the help of guidance or coaching they become a great musician. In conclusion, I support the latter view because I believe that if children should thaught they
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 have the capabilities to perform any hard task .
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