Many museums charge for admission while other are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

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days, the question of whether
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need to pay a fee to go to
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or not has been receiving an excellent deal of public attention. While I recognize that
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charge visitors has both
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and disadvantages ,
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, there are important
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for
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when travellers are charged. one of the
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is that the operators have more budget to boost service quality in
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.
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means that because of the money that
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from entrance tickets, they could invest significantly in facilities, redecorate or maybe approach
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cutting-edge technologies to create exhibits more attractive throughout
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and visual effects.
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, most
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are funded by the State so if more cash
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the govt can save more allow other fields like infrastructure, health care.
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believe that there are some drawbacks, which outweigh these
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. The principal reason for
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view is that the
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which charge a fee won't attract travellers and customers because they need a good range of prefer to gain knowledge from
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. In fact, in the 21st century, the economic revolution and technology age,
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accumulate information about the art and artefact by a small smartphone connected to the internet without tickets.
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, if
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have to cover tickets for visiting
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, the contributions of
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for education may decline and it's a negative influence on vulnerable
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like children, poverty
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, who haven't condition for the quality of living. as an example, in Ha Giang province, it's rather hard for students to go to school, including
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money on visiting some
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. In conclusion,
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charging
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for admission has some
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, I argue that the disadvantages of these outweigh the advantages.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Admission fee
  • Revenue stream
  • Maintenance
  • Overcrowding
  • Commercialization
  • Cultural heritage
  • Diverse attendance
  • Community ownership
  • Access to culture
  • Visitor experience
  • Exhibit quality
  • Cultural mission
  • Reliance on funding
  • Government subsidies
  • Cultural accessibility
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